Your WA2 essay is excellent from my point of view. You not only did a good job on finding out the facts related to your topic but also organized well. To tell you the truth, your essay is absolutely fantastic.
Although you did an excellent job in writing the WA2 essay, there are still some thing you can do improve your essay and thus makes it a more fantastic one.
The first thing is not concerned about the content. Remember our tutor told us to use TNR font? I think you use the wrong font. I think you use the Arial Unicode MS instead of TNR. What’s more, the line space is not 1.5.
Secondly, you wrote this sentence in your essay:”It means that the success of development of Generation IV reactors means a great improvement of living environment for human beings in the future.” It seems confusing for me. I did not understand it fully. I think if you can rewrite this sentence and make it more simple, it would be easier for the readers to read.
Apart from the above things, there are some other small things you can do to improve your essay. One is concerned about word choice and the other is about sentence structure.
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