PeerRev4_Xueyuan_byShenXijiao

I am Shen Xijiao, Xueyuan’s classmate. I am going to write my review on Xuanyuan’s WA2 draft.
A message to Xueyuan,
First, the structure of the essay makes the your argument a bit confusing. I suggest you to restructure your essay. Currently you are writing the benefit of Generation IV reactors at the beginning of each paragraph and you rebut the point from the second sentence. Since you oppose to give R&D funding for Generation IV reactors, I suggest you to put your topic sentence which list the disadvantage of Generation IV reactors at the beginning of each paragraph and explain it a bit. The benefits of Generation IV reactors may come in as a counter argument which helps to balance your essay. After that, you may write a rebut to the counter argument so as to make your stand stronger.
Secondly, some sentences in your essay are too assertive. For example, you have write, “Building generation IV reactors will leave us in nuclear-weapon-danger and terrorism-danger.” There is no support for your view and your judgement is so absolute that others can rebut your view easily.
Last but not least, the meaning of some sentences is not very clear. Thus, you may want to restructure it. Your references should be in APA style.
(Haha, I know my comments are very hush, but I hope they help! Good luck for your EG1471 exam and all other exams!)

Cheers,
Xijiao