Reply to Alfred's review on my WA2

Published by Liu Yangfan

First of all, thank you for your time and advice. I have read your review and found it really helpful to improve my writing skills.
As you said, I need to pay more attention to the structure of the whole essay. As an academic argumentative essay, it should follow either point-to-point structure or block-to-block structure. Otherwise, it will make the readers confused about what I really want to say. Besides, in individual paragraph, I also need to focus on the main idea of this certain paragraph rather than talking about something else. In addition to the mistakes on constructing the structure of the whole essay and the individual paragraphs, I also need to try to avoid common mistakes such as spilling errors and grammar errors. And you are really right that I need to spend time on building my vocabulary. It is true that I always cannot find some appropriate words to express my idea when I am writing an essay. This always makes my essay readable but not formal. Also, I need to improve the structure construction of my sentences in order not to confuse my readers. My so called APA style of my reference also needs to be corrected.
Overall, I got a lot from your review. Thank you and regards.